Vito Royan

Subject: Vito Royan Wed Mar 14, 2012 4:28 am

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Vito Royan

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Vito
is a fairly tall man. He is around 6'2, and is 162 pounds. He is a
built man, with dirty blonde hair aswell. He has blue eyes that are
intimidating, so I would always be on the lookout for him.

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Name: Vito Royan
Race: Caucasian
Allegiance:Dragon's Fang PMC
Preferred Gundam: Sniper/Artillery man
Age: 25
Nationality: Italian
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He
is a man with great leadership skills, that no body could take away
from him. He is a cold-blooded killer, which makes it hard for him to
make friends. No one should dare to meet him on the field, with his
motivation and alot of self-pride, he is almost virtually unstoppable.

He
was born in Italy, in a small town that was somewhat oldschool. He was
born into a military background, and his father trained him and his
brother at quite a young age. He loved shooting a sniper rifle, while
hunting for wolves in the mountains in France. He was a quickshot, and
always made his target. That is what started to make him a famous
sniper, because he was also so very young.

His brother and him
joined up with the AEO many years later. They were ready for the
training, and to be the best on the field. However they wanted to run
these tests on them, genetically altered human tests. While his brother
was under going surgery to be altered, he died from the enhancements
that didn't go well with him. Vito made it out all find however.

After
the surgery was successful, Vito captured a sniper Mobile Suit and
began to wreck havoc on the laboratory. He began to slaughter all the
scientist and military presence that was there. You could understand,
right? After he finally escaped with the suit, leaving the facility in
ruins, he began to look for a mercenary force.

Subject: Re: Vito Royan Wed Mar 14, 2012 5:43 am

I don't understand the whole "preferred gundam" thing, but because of being a soldier in the 2nd Lunar War, this will require 5 approvals. Also, you need to put what type you are. Normal will surely be it unless your thinking of enhanced human but that would be a bit much. I will hold on approval until an admin approves.

Subject: Re: Vito Royan Wed Mar 14, 2012 10:02 am

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Vito
is a fairly tall man. He is around 6'2, and is 162 pounds. He is a
built man, with dirty blonde hair aswell. He has blue eyes that are
intimidating, so I would always be on the lookout for him.

Name: Vito Royan
Race: Caucasian
Allegiance:Dragon's Fang PMC
Preferred Gundam: Sniper/Artillery man
Age: 25
Nationality: Italian

He
is a man with great leadership skills, that no body could take away
from him. He is a cold-blooded killer, which makes it hard for him to
make friends. No one should dare to meet him on the field, with his
motivation and alot of self-pride, he is almost virtually unstoppable.

He
was born in Italy, in a small town that was somewhat oldschool. He was
born into a military background, and his father trained him and his
brother at quite a young age. He loved shooting a sniper rifle, while
hunting for wolves in the mountains in France. He was a quickshot, and
always made his target. That is what started to make him a famous
sniper, because he was also so very young.

His brother and him
joined up with the AEO many years later. They were ready for the
training, and to be the best on the field. However they wanted to run
these tests on them, genetically altered human tests. While his brother
was under going surgery to be altered, he died from the enhancements
that didn't go well with him. Vito made it out all find however.

After
the surgery was successful, Vito captured a sniper Mobile Suit and
began to wreck havoc on the laboratory. He began to slaughter all the
scientist and military presence that was there. You could understand,
right? After he finally escaped with the suit, leaving the facility in
ruins, he began to look for a mercenary force.

I'll be honest, and I will keep my comments very simple, and very understandable:

1. Way too perfect character without any flaws? Vito might as well be the god of this world.

2. Virtually unstoppable? Really?

3. No one should dare meet him on the field?

4. Who the heck would want to take your leadership skills away? LOL

5. "Preferred Gundam"? Can't it be mobile suit first? No, no Gundam for you. Much less a mobile suit.

COMMENTS:

I think this is too much of a fantasy character, the perfect person? Needs more practice in grammar and sentence construction.

Has confusion using "you" and "I" in a sentence. Oh dear.

This profile brings out the Simon Cowell in me. This is just so bad.

REJECTED. I don't think I'll be coming back to read it.

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Subject: Re: Vito Royan Wed Mar 14, 2012 3:55 pm

Need I say more than what BRO wrote? Add a Genetic Type.

This profile will need 5 approvals. I will post again once you've collected 4 approvals.

For now.... Disapproved!

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Subject: Re: Vito Royan Thu Mar 15, 2012 6:17 pm

Please make the necessary edits Vito. Decisions can still be changed.

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